Week 6-Introduction-Three parts

  In the modern times, the Internet can be referred to as a great current of information, filled with ever-flowing knowledge that can both be beneficial and harmful simultaneously. Its vastness and magnificiency can be compared to that of a deep ocean, full of exotic marine lives and providing us with many gifts from nature, but also infinitely dangerous and constantly threatening us to consume and drown everything that dares to cross its territory. Internet can also be very much useful depending on how we make use of it, but all internet users are always at risk of becoming victims of crimes that are commited online. That was the exact reason why lawmakers brought the issue of internet anonymity to light, and bypassed legislations that limit anonymity of internet users to certain extent. Implemented in 2002, the South Korean government made it compulsory for internet users to go through self verification process by revealing their real names and social security numbers before being able to post their thoughts online or comment on a post. Originally implemented to prevent illegal election processes from being conducted online, this legislation quickly evolved into an combined effort by the govenment to prevent the spreading of unidentified information leaks and to gain control of the unexplored sections on the internet. Although the original legislation was shut down on 2012, ideas of regulating the internet still remain. However, due to many reasons that stem from various perspectives, I strongly believe that anonymity should be protected on the internet.

1. Attention grabber

-I attracted the attention of the readers by outlining the vastness of the internet and its enormity. I also made an interesting comparison of the internet and the ocean, pointing out the fact that they are both full of knowledge and values.

2. Explains the topic

-An explanation on the topic was done by giving some basic information about the key legislation that brought the looming porblem to light in Korea, including the background of the implmentation of the legislation, as well as the purpose of it. This gives the readers a better understanding of the thesis, and allows them to read o further.


3. My thesis

-I changed the wording on my first thesis, 'anonymity should be granted on the internet' to 'anonymity should be protected on the internet'. Anonymity on the internet is a fundamental right that is only right if given, and I thought by changing the word 'granted' to 'protected', the sense that anonymity should always be a part of internet usage, and that it should be protected by the government is more highlighted.